Peer Reviews

Peer Reviews are there to practically give you the opportunity to see any mistakes you made or those things that just don't sound to well put together. Sometimes a review can help you see something you missed and better your paper. There will always be something that can be improved on while writing a paper in my opinion. My peer reviews seemed to help my confidence in writing my papers. Sometimes they helped to steer me in the right direction I needed to take for a paper before it was due. Its nice to hear other's opinion on your work to help your writing grow. At first I had to get a hang of the comment style reviews on Buzz but once I got the hang on it everything got easier. I feel as if your first paper and your last paper will always be the toughest for a class. Your first paper you have to prove what you already know and with your last paper you have to prove that you learned from the class by putting what you knew to use. I'm not sure if everyone can agree on this but, I feel less confident than I have ever felt by writing this. That's a good thing because I'm out of my comfort zone and creating a new one. One day I will become accustomed to writing five to ten page papers easily. One day I will easily use active voice instead of passive voice when I write. Its all about the process of changing and learning anew when it comes to new experiences. 

Personal Peer Reviews:

• You start off with a lot of passive voice....
  Its very informative but, not that intriguing. It has a repetitive tone to it.
  You have a sentence, "Cal State's online library is not the easiest to navigate although" that just doesn't sound right. However, I appreciate how you list the bad of the site also...

-For Heinz Thompson on the Writing Source Review

•  I see "is" a lot and I thought we were suppose to try and focus on not using excessive passive voice. You have a very strong introduction that lists the qualifications of the website. You provide the reader with the multiple options given through OWL. And I can appreciate the fact that you've used the website yourself.

-For Megan Baker on the Writing Source Review

• This looks a little short of a page and I saw a lot of repetition in wording however, it reviewed the basic process to writing an information report which is the overall objective. A few sentences have grammar problems or are missing a comma. I loved how you used the GA BULLDOGS as your example. Love the team. Don't you think its so unfair that AJ Green is suspended for four games?

-For Heinz Thompson on the Genre Group Draft

• he citation in the middle of the review kind of confused me. Place it at the end cause it broke my train of thought. Your discussion is very thorough and gives the process that needs to be performed in order to have an awesome research paper. Good job Megan.

-For Megan Baker on the Genre Group Draft

• I love your topic because you're following something you love, this means you'll have a passionate paper. In your intro, you could try to discuss Lil Wayne's style in music over his lifetime and high achievements.

-For Eboni Jackson on the Writer's Plan Draft

• If you want to speak a little about his family life and contributions to the public that would help expand a little. It is a lot of drama with the the two baby mamas having baby boys around the same time. Very interesting, and his ex-wife and daughter. 
  I enjoy the direction you're going in though. Love Lil Wayne!!

-For Eboni Jackson on the News Team Draft

Peer Reviews from others on my work:

•  1. The fact that the piece was geared more towards a student, made it easy to read and easy to follow along. The part that I remember quite clearly was when you talked about how easybib dumbs down bibliography's to a pre-k style. By saying this, it makes the reader want to use this site more because they will feel it is quite easy to use. 2. I was confused at the beginning when it says Free! The best things in life are free and when you were asking questions. I feel like you used free a whole lot! ;] After the first paragraph, I believe the paper flowed more. After "it literally sucks for a lack of better word: I believe there should be a comma. 3.The intro, or first paragraph could use a little more about the site, or mention the site at least once. I would like to know more about the site, and which one you were reviewing earlier on in the paper.

By: Megan Baker for the Writing Source Draft

• This review is worded very "down to earth". One major thing that stuck with me about this review was how you stated that the citation generator was free. It successfully was worded to the audience of our peers. One thing at the end when you say "cite" it should be "site", just fyi. Also i feel like your sentence in the first paragraph, "Welcome to the good life" should be taken out in my opinion. I feel like it is random. Also you could expand on how to actually use the site and what information you need from the source. I also would like to know how accurate the site is with their citations. 

By: Heinz Thompson for the Writing Source Draft

• You love T.I. don't you ... shakes head slowly

By: Deonte Brown for the Writer's Plan Draft

• 1. I liked how you were engaging to the reader and how to exactly get what you are looking for
  2.I didn't understand what the first few lines were about
  3. I think that the part when you were like "the site may be considered a little bland to some" should not be there because I was interested in goin there until then. It made me less interested
  

By Jerome Walker for the Writing Source Draft

• dang this blew my mind! I really liked the statement "Just because you're a free man doesn't mean that you are free from the police." its so true. I'm doing something kinda like that for my paper on Lil Wayne

By Eboni Jackson for the Writer's Plan Draft

• You have a lot of valuable material in your first draft. There are some grammatical issues, and some sentences don't really seem like they fit like: Musicians sometimes tend to fall into trouble like rapper T.I. If you take a look at prominent celebrity's jail time seems to be something they all have in common. Some of these sentences could be put together...and some of the other ones as well.
  

By Megan Baker on the Writer's Plan Draft